Revised Todd and Dustin on Train

INT. TRAIN CAR EVENING (AFTER WORK)

The exterior of the train rushes by. Inside, Todd and Dustin converse after another typical day at work. Both are sitting. Todd reads the newspaper, while Dustin texts on his phone. The opening shot focuses on the newspaper’s front cover. Before they begin talking, the shots highlight the various aspects of their business attire – black, polished dress shoes, a briefcase, dress pants, a dress shirt, a tie, a wristwatch.

TODD

They’re trying to pass the death penalty in New York.

DUSTIN

It’ll never happen.

TODD

Some powerful people are for it.

Two women come into sight. Todd and Dustin both get up to give their seats on the crowded train to the ladies. Todd and Dustin are now standing — Todd holds the center aisle bar, while Dustin grasps the overhead bar.

DUSTIN

So you really believe in capital punishment?

TODD

It shouldn’t be about politics or lawyers. It should be about assholes getting what they deserve. If you murder someone, it should come back to you.

DUSTIN

So you believe in karma?

TODD

It’s not about karma, it’s about common sense. I believe in all of our actions coming full circle. That’s why I treat women well. I’ve learned to respect women, and now I wanna settle down.

DUSTIN

[quickly jumping in]

That gal you have your eye on is as good as any.

Dustin’s reference to Clara snaps Todd out of the newspaper article. He suddenly realizes that Clara isn’t on the train today.

TODD

Yea, it’s weird she’s not here.

She sits there every day.

(She always sits there)

The camera cuts to a close-up of the empty seat.

DUSTIN

[in a reassuring tone]

Probably missed the 7 o’clock.